well done
i will start by saying that i did enjoy this and i'm intrigued to see how it unfolds. you def. have talent with flash. I'm sure you wrote this story with the intentions of it being a classic mech anime, but have you considered bringing a completely different approach to the visual style? I'm not saying i dislike anime (i enjoy it a lot, actually) it's just that this has been done time and time again. with a story like this and your artistic talent i'm sure you could bring something better than another gundam(esk) mech cartoon. lemme know when you get your book published, i might have to eye that out.